«سأطلب بعد الدار عنكم لتقربوا، وتسكب عيناي الدموع لتجمدا»
I shall seek distance from you so that you draw near, and my eyes shall shed tears so that they become still.
The intended suggestion concerns nearness and lasting joy, but the link from flowing tears to their becoming still does not readily signal that hope. Flowing tears conventionally suggest sorrow; the opposite image does not so easily convey enduring happiness.
The defect is therefore not simply a grammatical placement of words but the difficulty of inferring the desired meaning through the allusion.